Sounds well
I liked a lot the melody of the beggining & the melody that starts at 1:54. I think the bass ( from 0:45 to 1:11) needs to be changed. It sounds like a very old style bass (like a trance track from 1995) But the melodies are just great.
If you can bring more power to them, this track could be epic. You also can try to give more importance to the lyrics, by inserting them in the second melody, and avoiding the part from 0:15 to 0:30
I'm not sure if I have explained well my suggestions or if I can help you. Not matter :)
I'll resume: with some more work, this track can be wonderfull